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:[http://guido.oni2.net/music/Oni2BeginningAnew.m4a HERE] you find an m4a file of mine. As the title says, it has something to share with that sentence of yours: "Konoko: Welcome to my collapsed moral universe."
:[http://guido.oni2.net/Oni%202%20-%20Music/Oni%202%20-%20Beginning%20Anew.mp3 HERE] you find an m4a file of mine. As the title says, it has something to share with that sentence of yours: "Konoko: Welcome to my collapsed moral universe."
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:Credit for that line goes to a book I recently read. It's titled: [http://www.powells.com/cgi-bin/biblio?inkey=62-1400034639-0 War Is a Force That Gives Us Meaning], by former war correspondent [http://www.pbs.org/wnet/religionandethics/week622/hedges.html Chris Hedges]. Quite a remarkable statement on both modern society and the human condition, and short [http://dictionary.reference.com/search?r=2&q=to%20boot to boot], so it's worth checking out. I've been pulling a lot out of it lately, honestly.
:Credit for that line goes to a book I recently read. It's titled: [http://www.powells.com/cgi-bin/biblio?inkey=62-1400034639-0 War Is a Force That Gives Us Meaning], by former war correspondent [http://web.archive.org/web/20130310151925/http://www.pbs.org/wnet/religionandethics/week622/hedges.html Chris Hedges]. Quite a remarkable statement on both modern society and the human condition, and short [[wikt:to_boot|to boot]], so it's worth checking out. I've been pulling a lot out of it lately, honestly.
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:Complementary reading/watching suggestions :
:Complementary reading/watching suggestions :
:#[http://www.pbs.org/wnet/religionandethics/week622/hedges.html an interview with Chris Hedges] : best read before or ''instead'' of [http://www.powells.com/cgi-bin/biblio?inkey=62-1400034639-0 WIAFTGUM] (much shorter still, less "poetry" and pathos, and all the relevant points are there)
:#[https://web.archive.org/web/20130310151925/http://www.pbs.org/wnet/religionandethics/week622/hedges.html an interview with Chris Hedges] : best read before or ''instead'' of [http://www.powells.com/cgi-bin/biblio?inkey=62-1400034639-0 WIAFTGUM] (much shorter still, less "poetry" and pathos, and all the relevant points are there)
:#[http://www.monochrom.at/amok/ Every Five Seconds an Inkjet Printer Dies Somewhere] : a short article trying to explain "pointless" massacres (running amok). A few considerations (primarily in the first half) are general enough to apply to war : public theater, some kind of heroism VS manifestation of evil (condemnation VS acceptance/glorification).
:#[https://web.archive.org/web/20200217020923/http://www.monochrom.at/amok/ Every Five Seconds an Inkjet Printer Dies Somewhere] : a short article trying to explain "pointless" massacres (running amok). A few considerations (primarily in the first half) are general enough to apply to war : public theater, some kind of heroism VS manifestation of evil (condemnation VS acceptance/glorification).
:#Stanley Kubrick's [http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0093058/ Full Metal Jacket]. Two memorable quotes :
:#Stanley Kubrick's [http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0093058/ Full Metal Jacket]. Two memorable quotes :
:##"Believe it or not, but under fire, Animal Mother can be a wonderful human being. All he needs is somebody throwing grenades at him 'til the end of his life."
:##"Believe it or not, but under fire, Animal Mother can be a wonderful human being. All he needs is somebody throwing grenades at him 'til the end of his life."
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:So, verbatim or not verbatim?
:So, verbatim or not verbatim?
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:Not verbatim, different context, but probably recognizable. It works though.
:Not verbatim, different context, but probably recognizable. It works though.
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:One thing to bear in mind about the medium is that unless you ''show'' Konoko talking, no one will know it's her.
:One thing to bear in mind about the medium is that unless you ''show'' Konoko talking, no one will know it's her.
:In movies, the verbal message is complemented by the actual ''voice''. Here, an off-panel monologue has the text as its only support.
:In movies, the verbal message is complemented by the actual ''voice''. Here, an off-panel monologue has the text as its only support.
:That ambiguity can be a drawback, but also a powerful means to achieve ambiguity. Does the narrator ''have'' to be Konoko? Food for thought...
:That can be a drawback, but also a powerful means to achieve ambiguity. Does the narrator ''have'' to be Konoko? Food for thought...
:For instance, androgynous characters work out nicely on paper : no disambiguation through voice.
:For the same reason, androgynous characters work out nicely on paper : no disambiguation through voice.
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:Idea : Consider the scene as coming directly after [[User:Geyser/Test|the scene that marks the beginning of Avatar's new life]]... ''Avatar too'' had his "moral universe" shattered when the [[ACC]]s blew up.
:Idea : Consider the scene as coming directly after [[User:Geyser/Test|the scene that marks the beginning of Avatar's new life]]... ''Avatar too'' had his "moral universe" shattered when the [[ACC]]s blew up.
:Actually, the narrative of the story-so-far can be first-person ''and'' impersonal. If no specific information is provided, the reader assumes it's Avatar talking. The page/panel layout can then be minimalistic : white text over black background, period.
:Actually, the narrative of the story-so-far can be first-person ''and'' impersonal. If no specific information is provided, the reader assumes it's Avatar talking. The page/panel layout can then be minimalistic : fade to black, white text over black background, period.
:When and if you "fade in" to a series of shots "starring" Konoko, there will be a sort of gradual transition from one narrator to the other. Not really "natural", but worth the shot.
:When and if you "fade in" to a series of shots "starring" Konoko, there will be a sort of gradual transition from one narrator to the other. Not too intuitive, but worth the shot.
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:Another idea : if you want to show a desolated landscape (wasteland, destroyed [[ACC]]s, dead cities), you can introduce Konoko ''gliding over it rather than walking through it''.
:Another idea : if you want to show a desolated landscape (wasteland, destroyed [[ACC]]s, dead cities), you can introduce Konoko ''gliding over it rather than walking through it''.
:With her {{C7}} glider. Reminiscent (of course) of Miyazaki's Nausicaä, but also of [[Lorraine]] Reyes McLees, [http://aerie.geofront.com/ whose homepage] was named after [http://nausicaa.wanfear.com/graphics/frontfly.jpg Nausicaa's Mehve].
:With her {{C7}} glider. Reminiscent (of course) of Miyazaki's Nausicaä, but also of [[Lorraine]] Reyes McLees, [http://aerie.geofront.com/ whose homepage] was named after [http://web.archive.org/web/20061205231725/http://nausicaa.wanfear.com:80/graphics/frontfly.jpg Nausicaa's Mehve].
:That sequence can be a semi-flashback dream of Mai's (the story would start when she wakes up). Thus some details can be surreal : her glider, for instance, can stay in the air for longer than "expected".
http://geyser.oni2.net/oni2/misc/morpho.jpg
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:As for Nausicaa, check out [https://www.viz.com/nausicaa-of-the-valley-of-the-wind Miyazaki's comic] as well if you can -- I liked it more, but it'll be harder (''looks like I can order it online. [[User:Geyser|geyser]]'') (and more expensive (''For 70 bucks. [[User:Geyser|geyser]]'')) to get ahold of.
;[[User:Geyser|geyser]]
:I went to a rather large [http://www.animenewsnetwork.com/article.php?id=5219 Miyazaki-Moebius exhibition] (Flash site [http://web.archive.org/web/20200611015324/http://miyazaki-moebius.com/ HERE]) in Paris, (February/March 2005) : quite inspiring too.
;[[User:Guido|GC]]
:[http://www.comicbox.co.jp/e-nau/e-nau.html I Understand NAUSICAA a Bit More than I Did a Little While Ago] (a long interview with Miyazaki about Nausicaä's universe and characters) (BTW, there's ''war'' in Nausicaä, too... [[User:Geyser|geyser]])
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:That gliding sequence can be a semi-flashback (day)dream of Mai's (the story would start when she wakes up). Thus some details can be surreal : her glider, for instance, can stay in the air for longer than "expected".
:Landing at the end... or not. Also, the picture of destruction can be exaggerated, or echoing other post-apocalyptic references (e.g. in manga). Various dream-friendly artistic effects, too.
:Landing at the end... or not. Also, the picture of destruction can be exaggerated, or echoing other post-apocalyptic references (e.g. in manga). Various dream-friendly artistic effects, too.
:If the narrative covers the skipped period in time (e.g. four years), then you don't even need to put a note saying "FOUR YEARS LATER".
:As for the smooth transition from one narrator to the other, [[User_talk:Geyser/Test#Wucraft|Avatar's plane]] can be shown flying away into no man's land at first, shrink to a tiny winged speck in the distance, and then come back as a gliding Konoko.
;[[User:Geyser|geyser]]
:As for the landscape over which she'd glide, I'd suggest a snow-covered wasteland (acid/toxic snow, anybody?). Then again, since a 4-year fast-forward is covered by the scene, different seasons can be pictured : spring/summer/autumn would be even closer to Nausicaä's universe (see [[Wilderness Preserve]]).
:The time scale can thus be distorted, similarly to the way (day)dreams are experienced : the whole (day)dream/nightmare seems to be played back super-fast at the moment you wake up.

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Welcome to my collapsed moral universe

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GC
HERE you find an m4a file of mine. As the title says, it has something to share with that sentence of yours: "Konoko: Welcome to my collapsed moral universe."

AF
Credit for that line goes to a book I recently read. It's titled: War Is a Force That Gives Us Meaning, by former war correspondent Chris Hedges. Quite a remarkable statement on both modern society and the human condition, and short to boot, so it's worth checking out. I've been pulling a lot out of it lately, honestly.

geyser
Complementary reading/watching suggestions :
  1. an interview with Chris Hedges : best read before or instead of WIAFTGUM (much shorter still, less "poetry" and pathos, and all the relevant points are there)
  2. Every Five Seconds an Inkjet Printer Dies Somewhere : a short article trying to explain "pointless" massacres (running amok). A few considerations (primarily in the first half) are general enough to apply to war : public theater, some kind of heroism VS manifestation of evil (condemnation VS acceptance/glorification).
  3. Stanley Kubrick's Full Metal Jacket. Two memorable quotes :
    1. "Believe it or not, but under fire, Animal Mother can be a wonderful human being. All he needs is somebody throwing grenades at him 'til the end of his life."
    2. and:
      • Git some! Git some! Git some, yeah, yeah, yeah! Anyone that runs, is a VC. Anyone that stands still, is a well-disciplined VC! You guys oughta do a story about me sometime!
      • Why should we do a story about you?
      • 'Cuz I'm so fuckin' good! I done got me 157 dead gooks killed. Plus 50 water buffalo too! Them's all confirmed!
      • Any women or children?
      • Sometimes!
      • How can you shoot women or children?
      • Easy! Ya just don't lead 'em so much! Ain't war hell?

geyser
Borrowing the first sentence of a narrative from an existing piece doesn't seem right. No matter how thoughtful and original a book is, you can't just go "pulling a lot out of it" ^^
So, verbatim or not verbatim?

AF
Not verbatim, different context, but probably recognizable. It works though.

geyser
If Konoko talks about her moral universe with as much distance as Hedges talks about his, doesn't that make her inconveniently lucid?
If she's spent 4 years rationalizing on her past and present, isn't she well-armed enough to face the future?




Narrative

(FIRST-PERSON NARRATIVE, MORE SPECIFICALLY)
(FROM KONOKO'S POV, EVEN MORE SPECIFICALLY)

geyser
One thing to bear in mind about the medium is that unless you show Konoko talking, no one will know it's her.
In movies, the verbal message is complemented by the actual voice. Here, an off-panel monologue has the text as its only support.
That can be a drawback, but also a powerful means to achieve ambiguity. Does the narrator have to be Konoko? Food for thought...
For the same reason, androgynous characters work out nicely on paper : no disambiguation through voice.

geyser
Idea : Consider the scene as coming directly after the scene that marks the beginning of Avatar's new life... Avatar too had his "moral universe" shattered when the ACCs blew up.
Actually, the narrative of the story-so-far can be first-person and impersonal. If no specific information is provided, the reader assumes it's Avatar talking. The page/panel layout can then be minimalistic : fade to black, white text over black background, period.
When and if you "fade in" to a series of shots "starring" Konoko, there will be a sort of gradual transition from one narrator to the other. Not too intuitive, but worth the shot.

geyser
Another idea : if you want to show a desolated landscape (wasteland, destroyed ACCs, dead cities), you can introduce Konoko gliding over it rather than walking through it.
With her CHAPTER 07 . A FRIEND IN NEED glider. Reminiscent (of course) of Miyazaki's Nausicaä, but also of Lorraine Reyes McLees, whose homepage was named after Nausicaa's Mehve.

morpho.jpg

AF
As for Nausicaa, check out Miyazaki's comic as well if you can -- I liked it more, but it'll be harder (looks like I can order it online. geyser) (and more expensive (For 70 bucks. geyser)) to get ahold of.
geyser
I went to a rather large Miyazaki-Moebius exhibition (Flash site HERE) in Paris, (February/March 2005) : quite inspiring too.
GC
I Understand NAUSICAA a Bit More than I Did a Little While Ago (a long interview with Miyazaki about Nausicaä's universe and characters) (BTW, there's war in Nausicaä, too... geyser)

geyser
That gliding sequence can be a semi-flashback (day)dream of Mai's (the story would start when she wakes up). Thus some details can be surreal : her glider, for instance, can stay in the air for longer than "expected".
Landing at the end... or not. Also, the picture of destruction can be exaggerated, or echoing other post-apocalyptic references (e.g. in manga). Various dream-friendly artistic effects, too.
If the narrative covers the skipped period in time (e.g. four years), then you don't even need to put a note saying "FOUR YEARS LATER".
As for the smooth transition from one narrator to the other, Avatar's plane can be shown flying away into no man's land at first, shrink to a tiny winged speck in the distance, and then come back as a gliding Konoko.
geyser
As for the landscape over which she'd glide, I'd suggest a snow-covered wasteland (acid/toxic snow, anybody?). Then again, since a 4-year fast-forward is covered by the scene, different seasons can be pictured : spring/summer/autumn would be even closer to Nausicaä's universe (see Wilderness Preserve).
The time scale can thus be distorted, similarly to the way (day)dreams are experienced : the whole (day)dream/nightmare seems to be played back super-fast at the moment you wake up.