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 "Saomi's death made me realize how much wrong I was. You know, slowly crushing bones make very memorable sounds. It's haunting."
-Konoko nose bone was cracking under Muro's punch another time. She staggered a few stepped backwards. The blood was all over her face, dripping down at her chin like rain.
+Konoko nose bone was cracking under Muro's punch another time. She staggered a few steps backwards. The blood was all over her face, dripping down at her chin like rain.
 "I cannot thank you enough that you burned that goddamn place to the ground. I wished I had done it myself."
-Muro and Mai were all fired up. The flames of their aura was all blazing and swirling lightening up the destroyed room. The difference between them was that Muro wasn't tired at all and Mai had become a mere punching bag.
+Muro and Mai were all fired up. The flames of their aura were all blazing and swirling illuminating the destroyed room. The difference between them was that Muro wasn't tired at all and Mai had become a mere punching bag.
 "I already told you: You are capable of so much more."
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 Chenille threads began to grow out of her skin, warping her up forming crystal patches indicating that the static metamorphosis was working at maximum. Her Chrysalis was in a critical state, completely restoring the body and hopefully her mind in the process. But it would take a while. He knew this all too well.
-One of Muro’s men was entering.
+One of Muro’s men was entering. [Use a name here from other chapters.]
 “Nice decoration.”