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 ===WISHLIST PART 2===
+{{GuidoWishlist|right}}
+'''''(back to a close-up on konoko’s face, as she stays defiant)
+;TEXT
+:One year before
-(back to a close-up on konoko’s face, as she stays defiant) [a text string states: One year before]
+;OLDMAN ''(from off-panel)
+:-- Fear got the best of you, Konoko.
-----
+;''(As we zoom out we see there are many other individuals around her, they look like an assortment of thugs: they are a grey mob in a brown sloppy square. ''KONOKO'' shares their <strike>same</strike> wretched color. They are all panting, after a first blunter. Most of them are turning their backs in our direction.)
-'''OLDMAN''' (voicing from outside our view) “--Fear got the best of you, Konoko�?
+;KONOKO
+:Won’t you ever stop cheating me?  '''''(grinning, beaten up)
-(''as we zoom out we see there are many other individuals around her, they look like an assortment of thugs: they are a grey mob in a brown sloppy square.'' '''KONOKO''' ''shares their same wretched color. They are all panting, after a first blunter, - most of them are turning their backs in our direction'' .)
+:I am sick of this! '''''(is this a brawl or a training?)
-'''KONOKO''' “Won’t you ever stop cheating me?�? (''grinning, beaten up'')
-“I am sick of this!�? (''is this a brawl or a training''?)
-'''OLDMAN''' (''stolid face – mid 50s'') “I can only show you a path: you are free to follow it, or to reject it as usual.�?
---You simply cannot carry with you this little girl.
-She can’t  get anywhere your way.
-'''KONOKO''' “I know what the men like you can do--
-(''coughs''! ''as a kick smashes into her belly''.)
-(''spits out'')
-(''raises her head, she gazes directly at'' '''OLDMAN'''’S ''eyes'')
+;OLDMAN ''(stolid face – mid 50s)
-        (''By now I can’t help figuring him as a combination of traits from Liam Neeson and Hugh Laurie'')
+:I can only show you a path: you are free to follow it, or to reject it as usual.
+:--You simply cannot carry with you this little girl.
+:She can’t  get anywhere your way.
+;KONOKO
+:I know what the men like you can do--
+;''(coughs ! as a kick smashes into her belly.)
+;''(spits out)
+;''(raises her head, she gazes directly at ''OLDMAN'' 's eyes)
+:::;''(By now I can’t help figuring him as a combination of traits from [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Liam_Neeson Liam Neeson] and [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hugh_Laurie Hugh Laurie])
 --I found her! -- she was still alive! She needed to breathe and I gave her the air, and she needs your water now! (''growing upset'') She deserves my help, not yours!�?
- ''The place appears something like a former rail depot area in the middle of nowhere.''
+:;''The place appears something like a former rail depot area in the middle of nowhere.
- ''There are several containers left, and probably a number of barracks or few improvised buildings.''
+:;''There are several containers left, and probably a number of barracks or few improvised buildings.
- ''The anonymous plain fades out into a dusty mist a mile away from the brawl.''
+:;''The anonymous plain fades out into a dusty mist a mile away from the brawl.
 '''OLDMAN''' (''he is perched on a small container –the small girl sits on his side. She is clearly afraid, as she knows no one but Konoko. Oldman observes the mess below in silence, then he rouses suddenly''--) Gentlemen! I said not one by one! Hit her all at once. She is starving: I know the lady, she cannot dodge forever everything you throw her way.
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 ----
- (''small hiatus, Oldman has probably ordered his men to clear the field'')
+;''(small hiatus, Oldman has probably ordered his men to clear the field'')
-('''SMALLGIRL''' ''stands apart but from her distance she cannot hear their words'')
+;''(''SMALLGIRL'' stands apart but from her distance she cannot hear their words)
-(''We see the other ones helping their pales and carrying away the two of them who cannot stand up. Konoko is breathing deeply, closing her eyes- she looks as miserable as ever in defeat'')
+;''(We see the other ones helping their pales (??? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]) and carrying away the two of them who cannot stand up. Konoko is breathing deeply, closing her eyes- she looks as miserable as ever in defeat'')
 '''OLDMAN''' (''laughs, as he approaches to her) (he is sincerely amused, there is no malevolence in his voice'') No-- Emery, let her be --
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 '''EMERY''': “-- Sir.�?
-     (''In the background'')
+::;''(In the background)
 '''MR. FAULKERS''' (''cannot conceal his disapproval to'' '''EMERY''', ''as they go away''): “Shouldn’t we end it?�?
-      (''in the foreground'')
+::;''(in the foreground)
 '''OLDMAN''': (''to'' '''KONOKO''', ''after a pause'') You are a freak. (still amused) The more you want to seem serious to me, the more you make yourself funny.
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 -- No… it is not the money they are given --
+:our governments only want us to remember why we need them –
+:but now at edge of oblivion--many have realized that a promise of order and peace is no more enough, and there are no more protectors we can commit our obedient consent.
-   our governments only want us to remember why we need them –
+;KONOKO ''(painfully raises on her knees)
-   but now at edge of oblivion--many have realized that a promise of order and peace is no more enough, and there are no more protectors we can commit our obedient consent.
+:Return to your Syndicate nest, instead of wasting your time after me!
+:I’ve never been your puppet!!!
+;OLDMAN
+:Oh... '''''(crouches)''''' in the matter of company, your choices have been '''''(getting equivocal)''''' a bit questionable…
+'''(thoughtful) (leaning over)''''' take this and clean your face…
-'''KONOKO''' (''painfully raises on her knees'') “Return to your Syndicate nest, instead of wasting your time after me!
+'''(very short pause)
-I’ve never been your puppet…!
+;OLDMAN
+:'''''(lowers his voice)''''' honestly, I am not bothering you any more
+:But these eyes remember you
+:standing in front of that mech.
+:The anger that drove you…
+:;''(a nightmarish vision of Konoko confronting and taming Gerion)
+;''(Seeing ''KONOKO'' hesitate)
+:Now, how do you think you can persuade me,
+:By saying you’d like to be a paramedic?
+:I can’t let yourself rot here,
+:or protect forever a child.
+;V.O.
+:You are crafting a place where nothing more can happen.
+:Well, do you want to bring her with you? '''''(emphasizing)''''' Is it because she reminds you of someone you have lost? Keep her, then! But, when will you decide she is ready to go, heh?
+:::Why do I fail you?
+;OLDMAN
+: Look at yourself, you can barely stand. And what you get every day is people biting your face.
+:Injustice?
+:Take it for yourself!
+:Now give your farewell to that girl.
+;''(small hiatus)
+;OLDMAN
+:... '''''(sweetly, taking ''SMALLGIRL'' 's hand, and drawing her close to Konoko)''''' Come here, Cloe. Tell your friend where I promised you to go.
+;''(''SMALLGIRL'' stands right in front of ''KONOKO'', who remains on her knees. ''KONOKO'' slowly plunges her face in the thick coat of ''SMALLGIRL''.)
+;SMALLGIRL
+:Why are you weeping? After all, he offers us to stay in a nice flat.
+;OLDMAN
+:'''''(to ''KONOKO'')''''' She is not leaving you, if you wish.
+;''(pause)
+:But this place is slowly poisoning her.
+:Consider this even.
-'''OLDMAN''': oh… (''crouches'') in the matter of company, your choices have been (getting equivocal) a bit questionable…
-(''thoughtful'') (''leaning over'') take this and clean your face…
+----
+{{GuidoWishlist|center}}
-(''very short pause'')
-'''OLDMAN''': (lowers his voice) honestly, I am not bothering you any more
-But these eyes remember
-you standing in front of that mech.
-The anger that drove you…
- (a nightmarish vision of Konoko confronting and taming Gerion)
-(''By noticing her hesitation'')
-Now, how do you think you can persuade me,
-By saying you’d like to be a paramedic?
-I can’t let yourself rot here,
-or protect forever a child.
- V.O:“You are crafting a place where nothing more can happen.�?
-Well, do you want to bring her with you? (''emphasizing'') Is it because she reminds you of someone you have lost? Keep her, then! But, when will you decide she is ready to go, heh?
-				“Why do I fail you?�?
-'''OLDMAN''': Look at yourself, you can barely stand. And what you get every day is people biting your face.
-Injustice?
-Take it for yourself!
-Now give your farewell to that girl.
-(''small hiatus'')
-'''OLDMAN''' … (''sweetly, taking'' '''SMALLGIRL'''‘s ''hand, and drawing her close to Konoko'') Come here, Cloe. Tell your friend where I promised you to go.
-('''SMALLGIRL''' ''stands right in front of'' '''KONOKO''', ''who remains on her knees. Konoko slowly plunges her face in the thick coat of'' '''SMALLGIRL'''.)
-'''SMALLGIRL''': Why are you weeping? After all, he offers us to stay in a nice flat.
-'''OLDMAN''': (''to'' '''KONOKO''') She is not leaving you, if you wish.
-(''pause'')
-But this place is slowly poisoning her.
-Consider this even.
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