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-===WISHLIST PART 3===
+<noinclude>
+==Wishlist Part 3==
+{{GuidoWishlist|right}}
+</noinclude>
+<includeonly>
+===Part 3===
+</includeonly>
-a cloudy sky can even concede sunny moments
+:even a cloudy sky can concede sunny moments
- The sun has pierced the thin clouds over.
- Through small windows it highlights white stripes upon the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins.
- There is a large placid flow in the middle, going downstream. It is a river or a canal?
- We are in front of a deserted town. A farsighted part of the city is still intact and inhabited.
- But it is cornered in our view, beyond the left shore of the water.
+The sun has pierced through the thin clouds above.
+Through the small openings it casts white stripes
+onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins.
-this hand
+There is a large placid flow in the middle,
+going downstream (duh??? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]).
+It is a river or a canal?
-casts a tiny shadow on me
+There's a deserted town in front of us.
+In the distance, a part of the city is still intact and inhabited.
+But it is in the corner of our field of view,
+beyond the left shore of the channel.
-makes you laugh
+:this hand
+:casts a tiny shadow on me
+:makes you laugh
- A Smallgirl’s hand casts a shadow on Konoko’s chest. Konoko keeps her eyes closed.
+A small girl’s hand casts a shadow on Konoko’s chest.
- We cannot decipher her face. She’s slowly hanging her head.
+Konoko keeps her eyes closed.
+We cannot decipher her face.
+She’s slowly hanging her head.
- Konoko hugs SmallGirl who’s laying on the ground.
+Konoko hugs the small girl who’s lying on the ground. She is clearly suffering.
- She is clearly suffering. However we cannot be sure whether it is Smallgirl dying,
+However we cannot be sure whether the small girl is dying here and now
- or a flashback where we see Konoko when we first rescued her.
+or whether it is a flashback to when Konoko rescued her.
- Other bodies are scattered all around.
+Other bodies are scattered all around.
-makes you think
+:makes you think
-  Now it is clearly a flashback, Konoko on a bridge at the same river
+Now it is clearly a flashback, Konoko on a bridge over the same channel (a large motorway bridge).
-             (a large motorway bridge).
+She notices the small girl on the shore, drawing dirty water from an old oil tank (sic? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]).
-  She notices Smallgirl in the shoreline drawing dirt water on an old oil tank.
-raindrops of yesterday are now dried up
+:raindrops of yesterday are now dried up
-           Pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples  its surface.
-musk breathes as you cut it
+A pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples its surface.
-and there’re people carried away from criticisms,
+:musk breathes as you cut it
-  The asphalt on the route is fractured by colonies of weed and musks.
+(do you really mean [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Musk musk]? or is it mold (fungus/lichen/whatever)?)
-  Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation.
-  Konoko follows alone the route, and enters a forest.
-we delay our anniversaries to the forthcoming years,
+:and there are people carried away from criticisms,
-towards new moments of
+The asphalt on the route has been fractured by colonies of weed and musks (mold? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]).
+Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation.
+Konoko follows the route alone, and enters a forest.
+[[Image:Smallred.jpg|right|thumb|Small Red<br>[[:Image:Smallred.jpg|(MORE)]]]]
-awaited rain
+:we delay our anniversaries to the forthcoming years,
+:towards new moments of
+:awaited rain
+The highest rises of the trees are grey, reflecting a suffering nature.
+By contrast, the ground layer has become a daze of disturbing phosphorescences.
-    The highest rises of the trees are grey, and reflect a suffering nature,
+:in another year
-    by contrast, below life has become a daze of disturbing  phosphorescences
+:there may be even unseen stars
-in another year
-there may be even unseen stars
+Shot of small tiny colored fungi lurking in the luxuriant undergrowth.
-  Shot on small tiny colored fungi lurking in the green gorgeous undergrowth.
-illnesses and mushrooms coming for us
-         View fading out into black.
+:illnesses and mushrooms coming for us
-'''V.O. OLDMAN''': What pushed you so far away from Neo Tokyo? Isn’t time for coming back?
+Fade to black.
+;OLDMAN (V.O.)
+:What drove you so far away from Neo Tokyo? Isn’t it time to come back?
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-{|align="right"
+<noinclude>{{GuidoWishlist|center}}</noinclude>
-|colspan="2"|
-'''FORWARD TO''' [[WishlistPart4]]
-'''BACK TO''' [[WishlistPart2]]
-'''BACK TO''' [[User:Guido]]
-|}
-Suggested pictures
-<gallery>
-Image:Smallred.jpg|Small Red (it is not mine!)
-</gallery>