User talk:Guido/Wishlist/Part 3

Composition of the second cut

• The girl is lying on the ground
• Her hand is casting a shadow on Mai's chest
• Kon is in a position to hang her head down

So, where's the sun again?

geyser 22:50, 2 October 2006 (CEST)

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Deadly fungi

A reference to Nausicaa, I would believe.

May be worth a reference to the episode of Jamie Hasegawa's death as well.

geyser 22:50, 2 October 2006 (CEST)

Good imagery, but push the fungus too far and people will accuse you of stealing from miyazaki.

I understand he's a major influence and the comparison will be made nonetheless, but trying to minimize direct parallels will help.

AF

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The forest

That one is quite interesting, especially because of the Red Riding Hood image.

I think I'll be putting my thoughts on the image page for now, and then move them around.

geyser 22:50, 2 October 2006 (CEST)

File:GUIDO whitestripes.jpg

roughsketch
(zoom in)

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"Through the small openings it casts white stripes onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins."

How on earth do you expect to render this? Just curious.

geyser 23:04, 2 October 2006 (CEST)

more or less this way...

Guido 16:42, 25 November 2006 (CEST)

Hm, that's reasonably messy for a 15-minute thing

(not like I really care how fast you work... ^^ )

(and the composition was thought through earlier...)

Not 100% convincing as for what's represented

(too much diagonal "rain or something" : misleading)

(without the verbal directions, it's really puzzling)

(in case it is rain : is rain compatible with mist? ^^)

If the striped mist is in the lower center of the picture,

then I think I get it (not sure I like it, but I get it).

Since it's a tricky scene, I sorta expected more detail...

Keep up the feedback. I may get back to you "in time"...

geyser 17:05, 25 November 2006 (CET)

File:GUIDO characters deployment.jpg

deployement of Konoko and Smallgirl
(zoom in)

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"KONOKO notices SMALLGIRL on the shore, drawing water with an old tank"

Picture, please. For the life of me, I don't get what's happening.

How can you draw water (e.g. from the river?) "with" a tank?

What, like with a cup? Dump it in, wait until it fills up, pull it out?

Might be a bit heavy for a little girl (starving/dying/whatever)?

The first version had "Smallgirl in the shoreline drawing dirt water on an old oil tank".

"ON"??? Do you mean she was drinking rainwater off the top of a barrel?

geyser 04:43, 3 October 2006 (CEST)

I just hope this will ease your pain, Geyser ... : )

Guido 16:42, 25 November 2006 (CEST)

That's better (vocabulary choices may have been better).

As for the picture names,

since they're attached to a single "node" (talk page),

you can set the name accordingly.

("whitestripes" and especially "character_deployment"

may well become ambiguous in a foreseeable future)

Re:Keep it up, there are still a few items for you to sort out ^^

geyser 17:11, 25 November 2006 (CET)