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::[[User:Geyser|geyser]] 22:52, 31 January 2007 (CET) | ::[[User:Geyser|geyser]] 22:52, 31 January 2007 (CET) | ||
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Rather than a translation, we may call this one an English adaptation. On a first reading, I didn't like the pacing of the dialogues in the [[ | Rather than a translation, we may call this one an English adaptation. On a first reading, I didn't like the pacing of the dialogues in the [[User:Tracker/Projekt_257|original version]]. So I thought a few arrangements might improve the overall effect, and reinterpreted this novel as a movie script. | ||
A number of passages wiil appear to be heavily rearranged, but I am convinced the results will stay faithful to the original meaning more than a literal translation could ever be. | A number of passages wiil appear to be heavily rearranged, but I am convinced the results will stay faithful to the original meaning more than a literal translation could ever be. | ||
Of course improvements (and proofreading) are welcome. If you have some, then help yourselves! I enjoyed the experiment, I hope you will enjoy the results like me... | Of course improvements (and proofreading) are welcome. If you have some, then help yourselves! I enjoyed the experiment, I hope you will enjoy the results like me... | ||
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The TSC filed Connors’s ongoing research as “Project | The TSC filed Connors’s ongoing research as “Project 257�?. | ||
What Dr. Connors doesn’t know is that TSC is determined to use his Cell-serum (or C-serum) for military purposes. | What Dr. Connors doesn’t know is that TSC is determined to use his Cell-serum (or C-serum) for military purposes. | ||
TSC aims at developing some kind of enhanced soldier, whose body can quickly recover from injuries and easily replace damaged parts. | TSC aims at developing some kind of enhanced soldier, whose body can quickly recover from injuries and easily replace damaged parts. | ||
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Carmen is a next-generation artificial intelligence that manages all monitoring and electric systems in the compound. | Carmen is a next-generation artificial intelligence that manages all monitoring and electric systems in the compound. | ||
Carmen performs functions of vocal speech and can generate holographic projections of herself. | Carmen performs functions of vocal speech and can generate holographic projections of herself. | ||
Bill often hacks into Carmen’s override codes in order to optimize | Bill often hacks into Carmen’s override codes in order to optimize “her�? logic and shape “her�? behavior as human as possible. | ||
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:As it seems, you stay amnesiac. Yet, your memory will come again... can you stand up? | :As it seems, you stay amnesiac. Yet, your memory will come again... can you stand up? | ||
''Connors nods as Eve tries | ''Connors nods and cheers up as Eve successfully tries to stand up with her own legs | ||
;Eve | ;Eve | ||
''amazed | ''amazed | ||
:I can’t understand. I feel no pain at all. What did you do to me?" ( | :I can’t understand. I feel no pain at all. What did you do to me?" (''rises and goes a few steps forth and back''). | ||
''She’s just awaken from the coma and she feels so good. Her amnesia seems quite a minor problem... | ''She’s just awaken from the coma and she feels so good. Her amnesia seems quite a minor problem... | ||
("It doesn't take so long before the young woman and the professor have set together a good mood.") | |||
(is it woking now?[[User:Guido|guido]]) | |||
;Connors | ;Connors | ||
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;Connors | ;Connors | ||
:This laboratory is somehow | :This laboratory is somehow “special�?. We have security personnel everywhere. Orders from above... Don’t you pay attention to him. | ||
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;Eve | ;Eve | ||
''hasting a reply | ''hasting a reply | ||
:Splendid, and you, well... you can call me Eve... it doesn’t sound bad at all. You know, I have some problems at recollecting things. My old life seems to have ended | :Splendid, and you, well... you can call me Eve... it doesn’t sound bad at all. You know, I have some problems at recollecting things. My old life seems to have ended. | ||
;Bill | ;Bill | ||
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''Connors finds that situation completely weird. Despite his joy, he is worried of the sudden changes in his daughter. Everything is evolving too fast, too easily. A telepathic link was something far beyond his imagination. In his troubled mind there are serious chances that the experiment gets out of control. He is not even sure Emily's cell structure will remain stable. The fear of having created a superman or a monster gets heavier and heavier. | ''Connors finds that situation completely weird. Despite his joy, he is worried of the sudden changes in his daughter. Everything is evolving too fast, too easily. A telepathic link was something far beyond his imagination. In his troubled mind there are serious chances that the experiment gets out of control. He is not even sure Emily's cell structure will remain stable. The fear of having created a superman or a monster gets heavier and heavier. | ||
''Connors | ''Connors glances suspiciously at the watchman standing in the entrance. He tries to interpret from his face what he might have grasped of the ongoing discussion. | ||
;Connors (V.O.) | ;Connors (V.O.) | ||
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;Emily | ;Emily | ||
'' | ''naughty" (or annoyed?[[User:Guido|Guido]]) | ||
:I am not a little girl any more. | :I am not a little girl any more. | ||
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;Emily | ;Emily | ||
''shaking her head in | ''shaking her head, (in surrender."[[User:Guido|guido]]) | ||
:I should ask Bill to generate some new cool design for you. | :I should ask Bill to generate some new cool design for you. | ||
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:Your orders, Sir. | :Your orders, Sir. | ||
''Eve pulls her brows together, | ''Eve pulls her brows together, in confusion | ||
;Emily | ;Emily | ||
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''The glass cylinder of a scanner comes down around Eve from the ceiling, enclosing her. Light rays slowly roam over Eve’s body, accompanied by a humming noise. Dr. Connors stands in awe in front of the readings on the display. | ''The glass cylinder of a scanner comes down around Eve from the ceiling, enclosing her. Light rays slowly roam over Eve’s body, accompanied by a humming noise. Dr. Connors stands in awe in front of the readings on the display. | ||
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