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;The sun has pierced through the thin clouds above. Through the small openings it casts white stripes onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins. | ;The sun has pierced through the thin clouds above. Through the small openings it casts white stripes onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins. | ||
;There is a large placid flow in the middle | ;There is a large placid flow in the middle. <strike>going downstream</strike> (duh??? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]). It is a river or a canal? | ||
;There's a deserted town in front of us. In the distance, a part of the city is still intact and inhabited. | ;There's a deserted town in front of us. In the distance, a part of the city is still intact and inhabited. | ||
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;Now it is clearly a flashback, Konoko on a bridge over the same channel (a large motorway bridge). | ;Now it is clearly a flashback, Konoko on a bridge over the same channel (a large motorway bridge). | ||
; | ;'''KONOKO''' notices '''SMALLGIRL''' on the shore: she is drawing water with an old tank (sic? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]). | ||
:raindrops of yesterday are now dried up | :raindrops of yesterday are now dried up | ||
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;A pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples its surface. | ;A pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples its surface. | ||
:musk breathes as you cut it | :<strike>musk</strike>mold breathes as you cut it | ||
;(do you really mean [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Musk musk]? or is it mold (fungus/lichen/whatever)? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]) | ;(do you really mean [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Musk musk]? or is it mold (fungus/lichen/whatever)? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]) | ||
:and there are people carried away from criticisms, | :and there are people carried away from criticisms, | ||
;The asphalt on the route has been fractured by colonies of weed and musks | ;The asphalt on the route has been fractured by colonies of weed and <strike> musks</strike> mold | ||
;Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation. Konoko follows the route alone, and enters a forest. | ;Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation. Konoko follows the route alone, and enters a forest. | ||
[[Image:Smallred.jpg|right|thumb|Small Red<br>[[:Image:Smallred.jpg|(MORE)]]]] | [[Image:Smallred.jpg|right|thumb|Small Red<br>[[:Image:Smallred.jpg|(MORE)]]]] | ||