5,389
edits
User:Guido/Wishlist/Part 3: Difference between revisions
m
Sorry for having mishandled your edit, Guido, I mistook you for myself ^^
m (Sorry for having mishandled your edit, Guido, I mistook you for myself ^^) |
|||
| Line 11: | Line 11: | ||
;The sun has pierced through the thin clouds above. Through the small openings it casts white stripes onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins. | ;The sun has pierced through the thin clouds above. Through the small openings it casts white stripes onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins. | ||
;There is a large placid flow in the middle | ;There is a large placid flow in the middle. It is a river or a canal? | ||
;There's a deserted town in front of us. In the distance, a part of the city is still intact and inhabited. | ;There's a deserted town in front of us. In the distance, a part of the city is still intact and inhabited. | ||
| Line 30: | Line 30: | ||
;Now it is clearly a flashback, Konoko on a bridge over the same channel (a large motorway bridge). | ;Now it is clearly a flashback, Konoko on a bridge over the same channel (a large motorway bridge). | ||
;'''KONOKO''' notices '''SMALLGIRL''' on the shore | ;'''KONOKO''' notices '''SMALLGIRL''' on the shore, drawing water with an old tank (??? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]). | ||
:raindrops of yesterday are now dried up | :raindrops of yesterday are now dried up | ||
| Line 36: | Line 36: | ||
;A pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples its surface. | ;A pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples its surface. | ||
: | :mold breathes as you cut it | ||
:and there are people carried away from criticisms, | :and there are people carried away from criticisms, | ||
;The asphalt on the route has been fractured by colonies of weed and | ;The asphalt on the route has been fractured by colonies of weed and mold | ||
;Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation. Konoko follows the route alone, and enters a forest. | ;Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation. Konoko follows the route alone, and enters a forest. | ||
| Line 54: | Line 53: | ||
:in another year | :in another year | ||
:there may be | :there may even be unseen stars | ||
;Shot of small tiny colored fungi lurking in the luxuriant undergrowth. | ;Shot of small tiny colored fungi lurking in the luxuriant undergrowth. | ||