User talk:Guido/Wishlist/Part 1
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- Question
- He was driving. He's badly injured. The car's on fire.
- She wants him to live and she wants him to understand that.
- Why didn't she rescue him first?
- geyser 13:17, 3 October 2006 (CEST)
- The answer is in what happened before the scene and I didn't tell you:
- Avatar asked Konoko to rescue his staff first.
- "No, not me. Take [care of] them first. There is time for me."
- Avatar asked Konoko to rescue his staff first.
- This request might convey a seemingly altruistic nature.
- However I imagined something actually different.
- Avatar once faced death and the loss of Simone, during the cataclysm.
- Now he finds himself again on the brink of death, trapped in his flaming car.
- Just like before he is trapped and powerless.
- Now he finds himself again on the brink of death, trapped in his flaming car.
- Whether he's aware of it or not, the sight of those spreading fires makes him recall
- that final moment with Simone, when her life was fading out in front of him.
- All he needs to make a perfect replica of that moment is to be left alone for just a few seconds.
- The car crash took him by surprise, but now rather than striving for his own safety,
- he is somehow paradoxically attracted by the perspective of staying there on his own.
- In a way it is the first chance he has ever got in his avatar-unlife
- to come back to where all began: again so close and yet so distant to Simone.
- Also, the principle of fire can be considered as opposite to snow:
- though a destructive one, its effects can be considered symmetrical to Avatar's personality.
- Snow "burns" when one touches it, like fire. But the former has a different effect:
- it preserves rather than consuming to ash.
- So we may toy with these two elements:
- the frozen winter night marking the moment in which Blackwater's life becomes like suspended in a dream,
- and the fire, representing the re- awakening of his past memories and the meaning of pain.
- the frozen winter night marking the moment in which Blackwater's life becomes like suspended in a dream,
- (ok, just an idea)
- Guido 16:45, 24 November 2006 (CEST)
- Freezing. Thawing off. Nice. I may try and work on that symmetry "on the snowy side"...
- You do realize that your original dialogue and directions conveyed none of that, don't you?
- And that it's nearly impossible to guess those things "right"?
- This page has been around for 2 months, with me understanding little and you saying even less.
- Wouldn't you call them wasted months, Guido? As far as this episode is concerned?
- You and your #%$£!§* "over-understatement"...
- geyser 17:47, 24 November 2006 (CET)
- Sorry for pushing you, but "I thought you were it do die" : what the???
- My exploding head is feeling better, but only a little, Guido, only a little...
- geyser 17:47, 24 November 2006 (CET)
- Comment
- good dramatic visual opening. captivating.
- conversation between mai and john needs work. personally i think it comes off as cliche because blackwater doesn't see it coming -- and this should be obvious to him, as it is to the reader, by mai dragging him from his burning car and bandaging him.
- Why, I'd say he does see it coming... He acknowledges Konoko's mercy early on, and the dialogue is basically him being curious about her reasons.
- geyser 05:44, 16 October 2006 (CEST)
- the grieve reference intrigues me, but this scene has to be pivotal by nature of it's function (enlightening konoko).
- What I'd like you to do is "bracket" this scene -- the nature of kon's grudge against blackwater, what she does next, their previous experiences together, all relevant related info.
- That "bracketing" is what wiki nodes are all about. Anything that calls for further development (here, for instance, Konoko's encounter with Grieve) gets a new page, to which we link from here.
- geyser 05:44, 16 October 2006 (CEST)
- Other questions -- she saves his life, he's important to her, yet she walks away. Why? She has nothing left, doesn't she?
- cf her monologue. Note that it ends on a question.
- geyser 05:44, 16 October 2006 (CEST)
- Lastly, blackwater becomes a big loose end if you leave him alive. You'll need to resolve that.
- Yes, he does become a loose end. No, we don't have to resolve it. Think different. ^^
- geyser 05:44, 16 October 2006 (CEST)
- Every time I look at my reflection...
- Ever went past two glass/mirror panes meeting at a right angle? You're basically passing another you.
- Not a mirrored one; one rotated by 180° and headed in a direction opposite to yours. Looking at you... And then... nothing.
- Looking at that "passer-by" is really different from looking in a mirror. Just a few thoughts... Multiple reflection are hell to render accurately.
- But a Konoko who's "passing herself" on her way out of the compound (during the monologue) is quite appealing, IMO. It's about missed opportunities...
- geyser 05:44, 16 October 2006 (CEST)