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:even a cloudy sky can concede sunny moments
:even a cloudy sky can concede sunny moments


The sun has pierced through the thin clouds above.
;The sun has pierced through the thin clouds above. Through the small openings it casts white stripes onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins.
Through the small openings it casts white stripes
onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins.


There is a large placid flow in the middle.
;There is a large placid flow in the middle, going downstream (duh??? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]). It is a river or a canal?
It is a river or a canal?


There's a deserted town in front of us.
;There's a deserted town in front of us. In the distance, a part of the city is still intact and inhabited.
In the distance, a part of the city is still intact and inhabited.
;However, it's in the corner of our field of view, beyond the left shore of the channel.
But it is in the corner of our field of view,
beyond the left shore of the channel.


:this hand
:this hand
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:makes you laugh
:makes you laugh


A small girl’s hand casts a shadow on Konoko’s chest.
;A small girl’s hand casts a shadow on Konoko’s chest. Konoko keeps her eyes closed.
Konoko keeps her eyes closed.  
;We cannot decipher her face. She’s slowly hanging her head.
We cannot decipher her face.
She’s slowly hanging her head.


Konoko hugs the small girl who’s lying on the ground. She is clearly suffering.
;Konoko hugs the small girl who’s lying on the ground. She is clearly suffering.
However we cannot be sure whether the small girl is dying here and now
;However, we cannot be sure whether the small girl is dying here and now or whether it is a flashback to when Konoko rescued her.
or whether it is a flashback to when Konoko rescued her.
;Other bodies are scattered all around.
 
Other bodies are scattered all around.


:makes you think
:makes you think


Now it is clearly a flashback. '''KONOKO''' on a bridge over the same channel (a large motorway bridge).
;Now it is clearly a flashback, Konoko on a bridge over the same channel (a large motorway bridge).
'''KONOKO''''' notices '''SMALLGIRL''': she is on the shore, drawing water with an old tank (sic? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]).
;She notices the small girl on the shore, drawing dirty water from an old oil tank (sic? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]).


:raindrops of yesterday are now dried up
:raindrops of yesterday are now dried up


A pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples its surface.
;A pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples its surface.


:mold breathes as you cut it
:musk breathes as you cut it
;(do you really mean [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Musk musk]? or is it mold (fungus/lichen/whatever)? [[User:Geyser|geyser]])


:and there are people carried away from criticisms,
:and there are people carried away from criticisms,


The asphalt on the route has been fractured by colonies of weed and mold.  
;The asphalt on the route has been fractured by colonies of weed and musks (mold? [[User:Geyser|geyser]]).  
Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation.  
;Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation. Konoko follows the route alone, and enters a forest.
Konoko follows the route alone, and enters a forest.
[[Image:Smallred.jpg|right|thumb|Small Red<br>[[:Image:Smallred.jpg|(MORE)]]]]
[[Image:Smallred.jpg|right|thumb|Small Red<br>[[:Image:Smallred.jpg|(MORE)]]]]


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:awaited rain
:awaited rain


The highest rises of the trees are grey, reflecting a suffering nature.
;The highest rises of the trees are grey, reflecting a suffering nature.
By contrast, the ground layer has become a daze of disturbing phosphorescences.
;By contrast, the ground layer has become a daze of disturbing phosphorescent lights.


:in another year
:in another year
:there may be even unseen stars
:there may be even unseen stars


Shot of small tiny colored fungi lurking in the luxuriant undergrowth.
;Shot of small tiny colored fungi lurking in the luxuriant undergrowth.


:illnesses and mushrooms coming for us
:illnesses and mushrooms coming for us


Fade to black.
;Fade to black.


;OLDMAN (V.O.)
;OLD MAN (V.O.)
:What drove you so far away from Neo Tokyo? Isn’t it time to come back?
:What drove you so far away from Neo-Tokyo? Isn’t it time to come back?
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Revision as of 21:00, 2 October 2006

Wishlist Part 3

Guido's Wishlist : trial scenes for Oni 2

  1. Avatar and Konoko
  2. Oldman, Konoko and SmallGirl
  3. Mushroom Drunkyard
  4. Show me the way to NeoTokyo


even a cloudy sky can concede sunny moments
The sun has pierced through the thin clouds above. Through the small openings it casts white stripes onto the snakes of mist swarming amidst the ruins.
There is a large placid flow in the middle, going downstream (duh??? geyser). It is a river or a canal?
There's a deserted town in front of us. In the distance, a part of the city is still intact and inhabited.
However, it's in the corner of our field of view, beyond the left shore of the channel.
this hand
casts a tiny shadow on me
makes you laugh
A small girl’s hand casts a shadow on Konoko’s chest. Konoko keeps her eyes closed.
We cannot decipher her face. She’s slowly hanging her head.
Konoko hugs the small girl who’s lying on the ground. She is clearly suffering.
However, we cannot be sure whether the small girl is dying here and now or whether it is a flashback to when Konoko rescued her.
Other bodies are scattered all around.
makes you think
Now it is clearly a flashback, Konoko on a bridge over the same channel (a large motorway bridge).
She notices the small girl on the shore, drawing dirty water from an old oil tank (sic? geyser).
raindrops of yesterday are now dried up
A pool of rainwater, Konoko’s foot ripples its surface.
musk breathes as you cut it
(do you really mean musk? or is it mold (fungus/lichen/whatever)? geyser)
and there are people carried away from criticisms,
The asphalt on the route has been fractured by colonies of weed and musks (mold? geyser).
Unearthly colors saturate the vegetation. Konoko follows the route alone, and enters a forest.
we delay our anniversaries to the forthcoming years,
towards new moments of
awaited rain
The highest rises of the trees are grey, reflecting a suffering nature.
By contrast, the ground layer has become a daze of disturbing phosphorescent lights.
in another year
there may be even unseen stars
Shot of small tiny colored fungi lurking in the luxuriant undergrowth.
illnesses and mushrooms coming for us
Fade to black.
OLD MAN (V.O.)
What drove you so far away from Neo-Tokyo? Isn’t it time to come back?

Guido's Wishlist : trial scenes for Oni 2

  1. Avatar and Konoko
  2. Oldman, Konoko and SmallGirl
  3. Mushroom Drunkyard
  4. Show me the way to NeoTokyo